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Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Open




In ‘94
we sang along to songs
that used to slither, sweating, from the sunlight-lit, dusty, car stereo.

Now we rip-off scratched CDs
from record shops; in the hopes of finding sample tracks
to loop behind our backing vocals.

Try to propel ourselves
into synth-memorandum.

Attempt at expressionistic, elastic, corporate think-tank, forms of view.

Keep volume at premium.
Lights down low.

Spend away long hours
in diners
hurry on tooth decay
by rinsing milkshake round our mouths.

My parents were the screaming truth of common sense.

“Damn” I say, “I guess we’ll never get a record deal.”

sigh.
©2005-2009 ~nubianlover
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Author's Comments

not much more than what it is.

me and a friend wanted to hook up and jam but it turned out we had nothing to offer the world.

-=-

took a look back over here and stubbled on ~silenceinnumbers piece called 'Slumber' [link]

thought i'd go over it with ink and my own memory.

tribute. :salute:

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~mirija May 25, 2005, 5:36:32 AM
I like this pic :)

--
don't grow up too fast
don't embrace the past

this life could be the last
but we're too young to care...

muse
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~nubianlover May 25, 2005, 5:38:49 AM
thanks but it is a poem :D :D :D

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~mirija May 25, 2005, 5:40:30 AM
I know but I looked at the pic first ;)

--
don't grow up too fast
don't embrace the past

this life could be the last
but we're too young to care...

muse
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~nubianlover May 25, 2005, 5:42:33 AM
sures. :D

thanks for taking a look at anything.

glad you liked it ;)

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~MizzMarsh May 25, 2005, 7:15:18 AM
great poem, i like the feel and it expresses itself very well, neat adjectives, you really felt how utterly human it was :-) btw, whats the picture?
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~CalmB4theStorm May 25, 2005, 9:12:00 AM
Interesting... I love the alliteration in the first stanza and I like the way you kept the essence of real life in the poem with references to things such as the milkshake... Nice job!

--
Seeing is believing...
And I don't see you.

Parting is such sweet sorrow...
That it's almost sex flavored!

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~nubianlover May 26, 2005, 10:35:43 AM
just an artist friend's ;) a friend of my mother

i'm glad you like this one chica :D

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~nubianlover May 26, 2005, 10:36:49 AM
thanks a lot

your words are encouraging

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~MizzMarsh May 27, 2005, 4:06:02 AM
i'm afriad i'm a language phiostine.... --- chica? :-)
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